The mini-DV with first rough cut arrived from Lima. (Picked up in Barranco by Doris, who carried it by bus to Surco to drop off with American couple I met on expat list who flew to Chicago from where they Fed-Exed it to friend and Project Rebirth director Steve Mendelsohn's building where I picked it up from doorman to take by subway to Upper Manhattan to former editor's place who made copy on DVD. Got that?)
I watched tape twice with documentary friends for feedback. First time with Ingrid Patetta from Dashboard Productions and Kathy Leichter from Mint Leaf Productions.
Good thing I watched it with a group, because they saw it very differently from me. I couldn't stop my inner critic from blabbing ("oh man, we missed that shot...why didn't I use lights here...how could we have forgotten to...."). By end of 55 minute tape I was slumped way down in couch, ready to fend off barrage of biting commentary.
Actually they liked it! At first I thought they were saying that to make me feel good. But I think they meant it. Sure, at this stage - very rough, incomplete - there's all kinds of flaws, omissions. Scene by scene there's lots of work.
But here's the thing. We want to know whether we are on right path. And the consensus was yes. They saw a real story. They liked the characters. The structure - the basic way we intend to organize the scenes and tell the story - seems to work. The material is beautifully shot.
Problems: Too much voiceover. Pacing is off. The story doesn't always build. Turning points missing. Need to see the characters engaging with other people more, at times it's like they're disembodied from their settings. All seems fixable and what you'd expect at this stage.
I felt hugely relieved. Especially when it came to the structure, how we envisioned weaving Nelida and Cynthia's stories together. On paper it sounded good. But would it work? Funny thing is, I couldn't tell, because this first edition had most of Nelida's story missing. But everyone else saw enough to think it would.
I'm trusting my instincts and approach way more these days - I think the process of having to write out the story for the editor and for fundraising proposals really helped. On other hand, it's amazing how I can't view the material on screen objectively. I see what's flawed or missing, my mind fixated on what "could have been." Everyone else just sees what they see - and for the first time. Completely different experience.
Next day I worked with the brilliant Documentary Doctor Fernanda Rossi. All day session. We watched the tape and then scene by scene discussed what worked, what didn't, and how to fix it.
Nobody thinks we need more material - although there is the matter of a closing scene for Cynthia. After her journey to the provinces in search of the "soul" or source of folkloric dance, she returns to Lima with a transformed attitude. Need to show that. Got to call her, find out what she's up to or plotting.
On other hand, when I mentioned that Cynthia was returning to USA - probably in October - everyone agreed, THAT is be the real closing scene. Hmm.